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Announcement V
November 24th 2009, 4:27 am by Monty2289
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Alright guys, Sorry I haven't coming to the site. Between working on a new site and overwhelming amounts work, I haven't been doing this place justice. Alright so the break is keeping me from using the net as much as I can (or need) so I want this site's revival to be effective.

If everyone still checks here (and I hope you all do), we will continue with our stories …

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Announcement VI
October 28th 2009, 5:48 pm by Monty2289
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The RP Officially Begins Today!!

Interim this means that the "Sage Awakening Short Stories" can and must be posted within the following three weeks. - In the respective topics on the World Map. Please look at the "Sage Awakening Story" thread for any information and if it is not there please consult that thread in order to ask any questions.



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PostSubject: Vitus Anchorage   October 11th 2009, 1:41 pm

Name: Vitus Anchorage
Age: 14
Race: Hyrule
Gender: Male

Sage Element: Ice

Lore of Power: Snowpeak Temple

Appearance: Vitus has a height of 5' 6", a weight of 117 pounds and slightly pale skin. He has a tinge of blue mixed in his white hair, which is usually messy and sticking out all over the place. Vitus is tall for his age, and he is also very skinny, but is not as skinny that we would call "Skin and bone." This appearance is decieving, for he is stronger than he looks like. His eyes are a piercing light green, but his right eye is slightly darker than the other one.

Vitus wears a tunic of light blue, and has a layer of white clothing beneath. He has leather gloves that extend to his elbow who are secured with a strap of steel at the end. Vitus wears these gloves to cover a reminder of a past murder attempt, a lost ring finger from his left hand. Vitus also wears boots made by genuine tiger hide. He carries around a short sword ,that is about 4 times longer that a knife and very skinny, strapped to his shoulder.

Personality: Vitus has a somewhat cold, strict and ignoring personality. It is hard enough to make him smile, not considering laugh. He is also known as the "Limit of sarcasm" for he does not use sarcasm constantly, but it is extremely amusing when he does. He likes to think about whatever comes to his mind. His excelling ability to think seems to have used all the fuel, for his daily amount of sentences spoken on a day is less than the fingers on hands (nine for him). Vitus likes cold food, such as icecream, and apples(for no reason at all). He hates hot days and summer. Vitus' hobby is writing, for he does not like physical movement.

General Abilities: Vitus is skilled in attacking light enemies, especially when he is able to fight using stabbing and slashing. Swift as a cat, he is able to stab and slash enemies before they are able to attack him. The ability to attack first gives him great profit, for he is weak when the enemy uses hard blows. His stabs are able to pass through a certain limited amount of armor, and his slashes are able to be aimed at a vulnerable part of the enemy during the swing.

Vitus is also skilled in archery, a subject that he had practiced on since he was young. He is able to shoot enemies with great accuracy from long ranges. He is able to shoot continuously, but he is not able to shoot two and more arrows at a time. Also, he is only able to lock onto a target, and cannot attack two enemies at a time. However, the ability that allows him to lock on to an enemy gives him a higher chance of hitting the enemy, whether moving or not.

Vitus is weak to heavy blows, as I have stated before, and he has a small chance of being able to inflict serious damage on heavily armed and armored enemies. Therefore, he uses speed to match the power of his opponent's power. He has trained to run fast, dig swiftly, and jump high and quick when he was young, if you put aside the fact that he is light and small. He is able to go any direction, up, down, foward, backward, left and right in a suprisingly small amount of time. Vitus' weakness is that he is very vulnerable to long range attacks made by skilled warriors during his movement. This is becuase it is easy to see which direction he is going, and it is nearly obvious for his attempted destination if you know his direction. The reason why it is good for melee is that it is very hard to follow his movement when up close.

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Vitus woke up. He didn't know where he was. He didn't know what he was doing there. As slowly his consciousness came back to him, he realized that he was lying on a tiled floor. As his blurred vision slowly became clear, he saw a streak of blood. As he watched it, a searing pain came from his left hand. Then he thought he saw a person. He was right. At first sight, the person was holding something. then he realized what it was. A blood stained dagger. As he looked on, the person rose the dagger and attempted to attack him. The more it came closer, the stronger was the stench of blood coming from it. He thought he could feel the cold steel against his throat. He was lying there, helpless, waiting for the knife to kill him...

Panting, he woke. Mother... Father... Vitus looked around him. He seemed to be on a grassland. It was mid-day. He had over slept. The dirt road was nowhere to be found. Instead, on his right side, there was a large temple. He crawled inside it, desperate for place to sleep, and slept.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~9 years before~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


Years before, a military base was built on the ruins of the Snowpeak temple. Hyrulians came to inhabit the land and participate in war. The son of one of these Hyrulians, called 'Eagle's eye' for his keen sight, was Vitus Anchorage. Vitus grew up wiht the other tykes of his age. He like playing war games with them, swimming with them, studying with them and more. Naturally, he also had the same dream as every other tyke - to become an Hyrulian Knight. Unlike other tykes, Vitus had a knack of being able to use light weapons easily and having great accuracy with a bow. Being intelligent for his age, he was able to more advanced studying than other people. Despite that Vitus was with his fater more than he was with his friends, Vitus' father found out his talent at a very later age. Having noticed his son's talent at the age of 11, the father started to train his son almost immediately after a few tests. At the age of 13, the amount of improvement Vitus had accomplished shockedhis father. Holding on to the thin string of hope to become a Hyrulian Knight, Vitus and his father made their way difficultly. However, there was others wanting to cut that string. At last, through strong jealously and hatred, they took their move and took to cut the string.

During, that time, Vitus and his father was sword fighting for practice. Suddenly, a rustle could be heard. The father and son thought of it as a rabbit and continued their fighting. The the child suddenly saw it, a black figure becoming bigger and bigger behind his father back. The father was stabbed in the back without any time for his son to warn him. Then, the assasin swiftly murdered the mother. Vitus could do nothing but watch as the murderer killed his parents. What kind of son would not avenge his parents. Vitus jumped at the assasin and went into a concentrated sword fight. However, Vitus was still no match, for his opponent was a full-grown martial arts master. Even though avoiding a critical injury due to his swiftness, he recieved the loss of a left hand's ring finger. Desperate, Vitus fled from the grassyard. He was planning to go hide in the storage, but he fainted half way. When he woke up, he was nearly killed by the assasin. The father threw his sword at the assasin, killing the assasin and saving his son.

Vitus ran out of his for help, but it was night, and there was no sight of people. He found a wooden wagon filled with a stack of hay on a dirt road, and decided to sleep in it until it's owner came to it.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Back to present~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


Vitus woke up in the night again. He must have been sleeping for a long time. His Left hand was still bleeding. He decided to look around the temple. Little did he know what was going to happen, and how it would change is life.


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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 11th 2009, 11:29 pm

Reposted what I said in the P.M. Here

I can see that you HAVE been reading. In relationship to Skye, Yusei, and Zero's characters. So thank you for that.

First of all your general information is fine, albiet you took the easy route and tried to relate your character to the element of Ice as much as you could. And that's fine. Even down the the sarcastic and slightly lawfully vindictive attitude (when necessary). Xhanguha was sort of the same way.

The only thing you should mention is that your lore of power is the Snowpeak Temple and not the Ice Temple. The Snowpeak Temple is the reconstruction of a ancient temple into a military base. That base is abandoned (as of events in Twilight Princess).

Moving on to the history. A little brutal isn't it? Surprised. Lawful Good is the key. If you were a Hylian Knight that killed in order to protect instead of out of Revenge that would be a good example of "Lawful Good". Not getting so pissed off you got to murder someone. I don't think that'll get you into Sagehood.

Going back to the Hylian Knight story in general. No more Hylian Knights or Knights anything. The RP already has TWO knight backgrounds. I just don't want to see any close relationships to a knight anymore. Or even being one for that matter. I COULD make an exception if your background was tied to Snowpeak Temple where something could of happen to you or your father since it was a miltary place.

Regardless of everything I still liked it. Just that a few keypoints needed to be changed (if you don't mind). After that show me what you have and I'll be happy to accept it.
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 12th 2009, 10:31 am

Well the character looks really promising but you should listen to monty's advice!!
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 12th 2009, 5:57 pm

Well, I'd like to thank Monty and Sazu very much for advice. I will try to edit my appliation to fit your advice. Also, since I am new to Zelda, I wish for more advice later on. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 12th 2009, 6:25 pm

No problem. Regardless of my statement several hours ago I really want this RP to work. Someone is obviously going to make it difficult though. XD
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PostSubject: Edited   October 12th 2009, 8:17 pm

Finished Editing! I found out that just erasing the fact that I was with any relationship with a Hyrulian Knight would allowed to murder (For I am not forced to be Lawful Good). Also, I changed the background to the Snowpeak Temple, too.
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 12th 2009, 8:59 pm

wow, I like it... But you say you are new to Zelda, how new are you talking?
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 12th 2009, 11:25 pm

Copy over from P.M.

You still got lazy and presumed everything will be fine if you just tagged Snowpeak Temple as a military ground. And then proceeded to state that your character merely "WANTED" to attack out of revenge and anger. Which he did attack.

Also something that I thought would be obvious to your....Um...Your character is 14 presently. You mean to tell me when you were five you were an expert militant personnel with the ability to kill someone who is perhaps 5 or more times your own age. That's ridiculous. At the age of 5, you're practically a toddler.
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 13th 2009, 4:33 am

Ummm yeah, maybe you should make him a bit older....or not a fighting prodigy, also I think you should be a little bit more descriptive at least in your history. I find the whole "assasination-to-not-lose-one's-place" a bit bleh, also I though Link was the last descendant from the knight of hyrule so I thought that blood would be important, at least to some degree and when it said that Link was the last one it kinda makes me think that they are no longer in service...though in Ocarina when you buy the hylian shield it says "like the one used by the Hylian Knights" I notice that it says "used" and not "that was used" so it makes me think that they ARE still in service and if that was so I'd imagine that they would be best of the hyrulian soldiers and if that was so then the assasination couldn't take place until he was already in service to the kingdom and THEN there'd be a point to assasinating him...though that's just me...
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 13th 2009, 4:41 am

Link isn't the decendant of a Hylian Knight Surprised

Regardless though, it has nothing to do with this RP but your ideas and concerns are awesome Sazu (Besides the only one with Link blood in em in this RP should be the guy with Sumeria in his name)
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 13th 2009, 5:31 am

Ahhh whoops ;P jeje my bad, just trying to help improve the RP though in a Link to the past one of the maidens Link saves told him he was the last one to carry the bloodline of the knights of Hyrule or something like that so that's why I wrote that though I have to admit I haven't played any Zelda games in a while so I might be mistaken...
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 24th 2009, 2:05 pm

I'm finished editing my history. Changed the whole lot of the middle part. It was tiring. Hope it's all right. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Vitus Anchorage   October 24th 2009, 10:28 pm

Everything seems to be fine. Thank you for editing. Although that part about the Ring finger. I don't know how one would Dual Wield or for that matter be a specialist at created weapons out of ice if the right hand won't allow for weapons to be held. The middle and ring fingers being the stronger support non-thumb appendages. Ah well ^ ^
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